My Tanwha-writing

For the past few weeks we have been practising using descrptive language in our writing. We have been trying to 'paint pictures with words'. We all got to invent our own taniwha. We all drew our own taniwha and then we had to write about it and describe what it looks,what we do with our taniwha and what our taniwha is like. Then we read our work to a buddy and they had a go at drawing our taniwha. 

Create and Describe Your Own Creature

(taniwha)

WALT: be descriptive in our writing.  

Look at the description of a Nogard.  Now Create and describe your own creature that you will then be able to read to a buddy so that they can draw it.  Your description must be as detailed and clear as possible so that when you share it with others they will be able to visualise and draw you creature. Use lots of adjectives (describing words - big, small, round, green).

You must .....

• Have a name for your creature
• Start from the big things and work your way to the smaller things
• Describe the shapes
• Describe its neck, body, tail, wings etc.
• What does its head look like?Think about its eyes, nose, eyebrows, mouth, teeth
• Describe its legs/flippers/fins etc.
• What colours is it?
• Any extra details on the body like scales, spikes etc.
• Keep it simple and clear!
• Use correct punctuation and spelling.
• Check that your sentences make sense.

Remember that a good writer ‘paints’ pictures in their reader’s head with words.   This is what good descriptive writing does.  

Create your piece of writing here:            Brighid

Pukurua The Greedy

Did you know I have a Ahwinat? Well I do. Her name is Pukurua. Most people think she is evil but that’s only because she steals everyone's food! Her head is circular and she has an oval body and four legs. She has an oval eye as well as her two small wings on her back.  Her food basket is an oval like shape and it sits on the bottom of her back.  She has a mud brown head, neck and a back leg.  Her other three legs are pink. She has  four orange feet, blue eyes and thin peach hair which comes out the top of her head.  She also has two wings on her back and  the outer part of her wings is kikorangi and the inner part is kōwhai. She has a kākāriki food basket with a pango net. She also has a kākāriki tail with mangu spots and black hair on the end. Her hobbies are stealing food and eating. I love flying on Pukurua’s back. She can go as fast as the wind. When we fly we go up to the sky, under the earth and into the sea. I go everywhere on my Ahwinat.  Once we went into outer space and into a black hole it was like a display of colours.  It looked incredible. But then we had to go before we got sucked in by  gravity. I have an amazing Ahwinat!

My Ahwinat.                                                                    my buddys  Ahwinat.

Peer Evaluation   Name of Peer: Rebekah

What I think you did well:I think that Brighid did very well in explaining her Taniwha.   

What I think you could improve on: I think she could explain it a little bit more.

Self Evaluation

What I think I did well:  I think I did well at dasciving shapes and and coules.

What I could improve on:  Next time I could create a creature that is less common.